Essay 1

1. Title: The Desired Look: Nothing But Bones / By: Rebecca Patton
2. Intro Approach: Description
3. Thesis: The obsession of many young girls over their appearance or weight has led to a
growing number of people who have developed an eating disorder to try to deal with their
lack of self-esteem or other related problems.
4. The introduction was really good. It explained how young girls are way to obbsesed about
what they look like. They are exercising to much and treating it like it is a
compitition. The thesis statement also told how these dangerous methods of trying to get skinny
are leading to eating disorders that can eventually kill these girls. These young girls have a lack of self-esteem and other psychological issues. I think parents should be more involved with there children's lives. That may prevent further problems.
5. Concluding Approach: Prediction
6. The conclusion summarized the essay. Nobody really knows why people get eating
disorders. When doctors diagnose eating disorders they have to look at all circumstances surrounding the child. I believe it is difficult for doctors to do. Many woman feel that in order to look like a super model they have to give up food and starve themselves to the point where they are so skinny and grose looking. They do this to look beautiful on the outside. They do not realize that they look bad and are slowly killing themselves.